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trvrprkr | 11 years ago

Author here. I was definitely going for a neutral tone with phrases like those to make it less mundane/more human.

This feedback is great, and it reminds me how delicate phrasing can be and how differently things might be interpreted.

I'm going to polish it up and lighten the tone quite a bit. Thanks!

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