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Ask HN: How's my pre-launch copy?

2 points| bglenn09 | 15 years ago | reply

I've put up our pre-launch page at http://www.snapplans.com. I'm wondering if the copy is clear. In short, we're building a community that facilitates people getting together that share common interests and making it easy for them to connect from anywhere (by emphasizing mobile). As a value-add to the users, we're negotiating deals for them at local establishments. Does the essence of the value-prop come across in the limited amount of copy space? Any suggestions as to how to increase our conversions would be much appreciated.

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[+] Ntagg|15 years ago|reply
Not a lot of copy here to comment on. Feels like you're phishing for users...
[+] bglenn09|15 years ago|reply
No, not at all, I'm just trying to get the copy right. I actually cut the copy in half on the advice that too much copy on a pre-launch page can be counter-productive. Perhaps I should add more back to it.